Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While
some
people
think that every wild animal should be conserved, others believe that only some of them should be protected. In my opinion, it is crucial to prevent all of them from extinction
otherwise
our ecosystem would be destroyed. On the one hand, protecting every
species
of wild animal is considered to be critical since all of them play a significant role in the ecosystem. In one specific area, there will always be an animal web,
therefore
, if one
species
disappeared or extinct, the animal web in that area would be severely affected.
For example
, deer would experience an overpopulation if tigers become extinct and
this
would
also
have a negative effect on other
species
.
On the other hand
, only certain
animals
have a chance to be protected by
people
,
this
view happens because they think that protecting all of them would be a waste of money. Spending that money on other issues,
such
as education or health care, is better. Some
people
may
also
think that the extinction of some
animals
would not have many impacts on humans or other
animals
, and there may be a positive effect on
people
.
For instance
, if sharks are all dead,
then
people
could swim freely in the ocean. In conclusion, it is thought that every
species
of wild
animals
ought to be conserved because they have an important duty in the global ecosystem, others oppose that it would be better to only protect some of them.
However
, from my point of view, I agree with
people
who think that all
animals
are crucial so we should conserve all of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural habitats
  • ecological balance
  • biodiversity
  • confinement
  • natural stimuli
  • psychological problems
  • genetic homogeneity
  • environmental changes
  • adapt and evolve
  • survival of the fittest
  • social structures
  • communication patterns
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