Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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think that every wild animal should be conserved, others believe that only some of them should be protected. In my opinion, it is crucial to prevent all of them from extinction

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our ecosystem would be destroyed. On the one hand, protecting every

species

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of wild animal is considered to be critical since all of them play a significant role in the ecosystem. In one specific area, there will always be an animal web,

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, if one

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disappeared or extinct, the animal web in that area would be severely affected.

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, deer would experience an overpopulation if tigers become extinct and

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would

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have a negative effect on other

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On the other hand

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, only certain

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have a chance to be protected by

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view happens because they think that protecting all of them would be a waste of money. Spending that money on other issues,

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as education or health care, is better. Some

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think that the extinction of some

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would not have many impacts on humans or other

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, and there may be a positive effect on

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, if sharks are all dead,

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people

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could swim freely in the ocean. In conclusion, it is thought that every

species

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of wild

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ought to be conserved because they have an important duty in the global ecosystem, others oppose that it would be better to only protect some of them.

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, from my point of view, I agree with

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who think that all

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are crucial so we should conserve all of them.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the points that will be discussed in the essay.

coherence cohesion

Develop each main point in its own paragraph and link these ideas with transition words for better flow.

coherence cohesion

Include a wider range of cohesive devices and vary your sentence structures more.

task achievement

Fully address all parts of the task by discussing both views and giving your opinion throughout the essay.

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Expand upon your opinion with more detailed examples and explanations.

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Use a variety of sentence types and vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

269 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

natural habitats
ecological balance
biodiversity
confinement
natural stimuli
psychological problems
genetic homogeneity
environmental changes
adapt and evolve
survival of the fittest
social structures
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