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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#technologies #children #time
Most
children
 leisure time is shifting towards online or virtual meet from the physical presence. Even
adult
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 these days are on the verge of completely
shift
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 due to the advancement in technology. Shifting towards these new technologies have brought very pros and cons which are discussed as below which in order are explained below. On one hand,
children
 nowadays are pretty much fast forward.
For instance
, on one of the surveys conducted by the information technology department in Kathmandu, they found that
children
 below 5 years of age were found talking about the video calling feature of Facebook and their experience with their elder brother. Since
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 they have significantly gained the experience of social media and had made its full use. Due to the same reason their life better now.
On the other hand
, the emergence of addiction is one of the concerning issues.
For example
, many
children
 these days are stuck to their mobile phones
instead
 of performing their day to activities.
This
 had led to the emergence of serious issues and choas everything. After looking at both sides of a coin, there seems the problem of addiction due to overuse.
Therefore
,
children
 with new technologies will benefit more benefitted if they use them under timed circumstances.
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  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Inappropriate content
  • Self-learning
  • Screen time
  • Social inequality
  • Enhanced communication
  • Creative expression
  • Educational resources
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