Universities should take the same number of man and women in each major. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement
In some people's opinion , there should be the same quantity of men and women
students
in each major of every university. in
my perspective, it would be more beneficial for universities and Capitalize word
In
students
as well and I agree with this
statement.
Many individuals believe that it has advantages if there are the same number of girls and boys at universities. For example
, many things such
as rules, subjects and other students
' items become equal among students
and teachers can easily control their behaviour without using any punishments. ,Also
there would not be any bullying among male and female students
as if the rates of one gender increase than another,there will be some arguments between students
. So this
statement can be a solution for such
kinds of issues.
On the other side
some other humans may argue about Add a comma
side,
this
opinion , as they may prefer other kinds of studying such
as learning separately according to
genders
. By Fix the agreement mistake
gender
such
kind of studying everyone can get some profits but on the other ,hand it can be a disadvantage for their future life as they may lose communication skills with each other. In addition
, some humans claim that the quantity of males and females is not important for university as the rates of their results of education is
the first priority. But it can create some problems as Change the verb form
are
i
mentioned above.
In conclusion, Change the capitalization
I
while
people vary from each other Correct word choice
apply
by
their opinions. I think Change preposition
in
this
statement can bring some good effects for everyone and their universities at the same time.Submitted by mallaboyevshoxbozbek77 on
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Task Achievement
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