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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The crime rate
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 youth is on the rise in various nations. The factors causing the crime are complex;
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,
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 can be worked out. In
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 to be possible. Perhaps the main cause is issues associated with family, which plays a big role in the development of the youth.
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, children, who are raised by grandparents or other caregivers,
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challenge
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 attention and
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 these youngsters, end up in an
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 environment. The lack of attention or improper surroundings can lead to various types of psychological issues
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 as depression, anxiety and excessive aggression in teenagers, which is a second factor of juvenile delinquency.
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, there are practical solutions to prevent these conflicts. Primarily,
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secondary schools
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offer a wide variety of
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 like schoolchildren in
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voluntary activities in elderly nursing homes. If
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sense of solidarity and responsibility in minors.
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, the rehabilitation and re-socialization
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 for those who have committed crimes should be improved more beneficially.
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, it can allow them
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 to society as full members or to prevent re-offending.
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,
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family issues and psychological problems appear to be
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 causes to push a child
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commit a crime. A coordinated response by the educational institution and communal activity may well lower the illegal act.
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