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Due to development of internet public libraries are no longer necessary

In
this
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 digital world, a number of people are found using the
internet
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 rather than reading
books
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. Some people say no need for public libraries after the development of
technology
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 . I completely agree with the statement It is due to the vast development in
technology
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 which is even taking more shapes into mobile platforms in the future.
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 with,
internet
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technology
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 has greatly overpowered physical resources
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 as
books
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. Students are nowadays found studying online through educational websites and attending classes using software
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 as Skype.
For example
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, a student likes to search a particular term in Google
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 as robotics, genetics or others to find all the relevant information in no time.
On the other hand
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,
books
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 are merely used for references by today’s youngsters who actually like to spend more time using computers and studying with video tutorials or audio files in an e-learning environment rather than studying
books
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.
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, with the increasing advancement in the field of
technology
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, it is likely that there could be a drastic shift from learning on a computer to studying on mobile, and
this
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 would reduce the habit of reading
books
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 but not completely. The craze of using mobile apps can be well seen as every child is carrying a smartphone to use apps for various learning needs.
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, if anyone needs to use the dictionary, he uses dictionary apps that are available both offline and online. On the whole, I believe that the
internet
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 would continue to be dominating over
books
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 but a noticeable thing is that there could be a slight shift in the devices used for accessing the
internet
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 to study, from computers to mobile applications.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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