Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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this

modern era,

the

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society is divided into two groups as the distinct mindset of different people.

Therefore

, it has become a debatable issue whether

animals

should be kept in cages in

zoos

for educational and entertainment purposes or it is totally unethical to keep them in

zoos

. In

this

essay, I will elaborate

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point of view by analyzing both sides of the

arguments

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. On the one hand, it is argued by some that

animals

must be confined in

zoos

and they are giving many logical reasons for the same argument.

Firstly

, environmental perspective, many humans think that

zoos

play a crucial role in wildlife conservation; in fact, for those

animals

which are endangered and near to extinction. In

this

way, they will be protected from predators, cultural and atmospheric changes and would not need to worry about the food. These confined

animals

in cages are very handy for researchers and animal scientists to study animal behaviour.

Secondly

zoos

employ trainers and other members for the protection and caring of these

animals

, so it will create new jobs for

local

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area;

moreover

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the visit of families and children of all ages in

zoos

create a healthy income which may be used for conservation projects.

Finally

zoos

provide easy access for everyone to entertain.

For instance

, tourists from other countries of the world often visit

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the

zoos

of India for seeing ‘White Tigers’. At the same time, entertainment is

also

given to visitors by showing different actions of wild

animals

However

on the other hand

, many people think that it is

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wrong behaviour to

kept

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animals

zoos

. According to them, it is of no use to keep these creatures in cages as it will impact

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their instinct of hunting or preying;

however

, captivating in small places will

also

reduce their ability to think cleverly and in an efficient manner.

Moreover

, it will have a psychological effect on their brains and cause health issues.

Also

, morally, it is not a good practice to keep these species in

zoos

, as it is against their freedom and zoo owners will exploit them for money. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments for and against

the

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animals

keeping

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zoos

However

, I personally believe that everyone in

this

world has a right to live as per their choices and we are no one to put our choices on others; even on small creatures, like insects or

animals

;

therefore

, I think that

animals

should not be confined in any way in these

zoos

and will leave them

freely

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to make their living in

this

ecosystem and in their natural habitats.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

captivity
natural habitat
artificial enclosures
genetic diversity
animal welfare
conservation efforts
endangered species
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