Some people think music plays an important role in society. Others think it is it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion.

Music

is the most crucial aspect of

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life

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in

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nowadays and

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can reduce people's stress and depression. Some believe that

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music

plays a crucial

part

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society

, while others say that

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the

melody is the only

form

of relaxation.

This

essay discusses both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, the melody is the only

form

of entertainment and

this

can reduce stress and depression. More and more folks use the

music

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a relaxation purpose, some can use the

music

in travel time,

therefore

, they can enjoy theirs' travel even in long hours travel.

For example

,Indian buses play the

music

while travelling in order to

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attracting

the customers,

therefore

, the

music

is only the

form

of relaxation purpose and we do not give more attention

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this

.

On the other hand

, the melodies is an

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essential

aspect of

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life as well as

society

;

this

can reflect our's traditions, values, and cultures. Many musicians can create social awareness by making

music

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people can get more awareness about any incidents easily.

For instance

, the

world famous

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music

group BTS earns a million amount of dollars

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each year

to

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around the world and folks

also

like to

listen

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these kinds of melodies.

Hence

, the melody is a crucial

part

in

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of

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society

. To conclude,

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music

is an

essensial

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essential

part

of our life and

this

can reflect

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cultures, values, and traditions but

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melodies

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the only

form

of entertainment and

this

can reduce

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stress and depression. In my opinion, about

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,

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music

plays an important

part

in

society

. I believe that

this

process is conducive to spreading our's values

to

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around

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the

world

by

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music

.