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In some countries students pay their own university and college fees, however in other countries government pays their fees. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Amongst the many major social and educational issues with downsides and plus points, which individual have to deal with educational fees for
university
 is being certainly considered as one of the most controversial ones. While some people fall for advantages of
this
, there are many others who beg to differ. They mostly argue the positives of
such
 a practice. On the one hand, obtaining fees from
students
 is an opportunity to earn a tax.
That is
 to say more student pay
university
 bill and
university
 give a tax to
government
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the government
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then
government
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the government
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 use
this
 money for educational problems.
For example
,
new
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 school,
modern
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 class is built by
government
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the government
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 at the expense of tax and increasing education level. The
second
 intrinsic merit to
this
 idea, from many points of view, can be setting new science laboratory,
research
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a research
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 project by the
university
.
In other words
, education fees help both
university
 and the state expense money
other
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 project and
supported
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 it.
On the other hand
, from an empirical
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viewpoint
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view point
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 gaining money from
students
 might have a couple of downsides, as well. For one thing, according to
university
 price,
the
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most
of
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the
student
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students
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 can not start
university
 and
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a collage
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college
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collage
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college
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 degree is looked at, by many people as a demerit.
This
 means
,
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students
 who want to enter
the
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 good
university
 where
university
fee
 is compulsory and pupils do not
supported
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 it.
In addition
,
country
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the country
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where
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, where government pay their college and university fee for students,
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government
 pay their college and
university
fee
 for
students
 have a lot of expenditure in the commonwealth budget.
However
,
the
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most
of
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student
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students
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have
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do have
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not
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no
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problem
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a problem
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university
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with university
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 and college
fee
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fees
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 and start
easier
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an easier
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bachelor
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a bachelor
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 or master degree. Taking both sides into account, I can safely state that purchasing
academics
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fee
 for
government
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the government
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.
However
, after a
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thorough
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through
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 consideration, I have come to
conclusion
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the conclusion
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 that the demerits can eclipse the advantages.
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