Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in need. Others however prefer to give money to national and international charitable organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that there are two major
ways
to participate in charity activities. For some
people
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it’s
more preferable to know exactly whom they help and others prefer to
support
centralised local and
iternational
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international
charity programs. From my point of
view
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direct
support
may be provided in all
kind
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of
ways
so
it’s
preferable for me while
help
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via charitable
centers
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could be done in general via money and clothes donations. Let’s review both
ways
in more
details
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. Donating via charitable organizations allow
to
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participate in big national programs and help remotely worldwide.
This
way
it’s
possible to help someone in a distance or even provide indirect help for nature saving or cosmos research programs and
it’s
really great to unite resources
this
way
.
On the other
hand
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it’s
hard to feel
involvement
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in the process
this
way
and for some
people
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it looks too easy and not counted as something real.
For
example
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there are exist bank card offers with automatic small percentage payments to WWF, Greenpiece or Red Cross from each incoming transaction. Another
way
to provide
support
is to meet
peoples
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people
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in person and supply them with money, food, clothes or help with some work.
This
type of charity allows to be involved in
process
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the process
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and work together with others shoulder to shoulder.
It’s
very important to be satisfied with
results
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of your activity and with personal
help
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you will receive direct warm feedback in most cases.
Personally
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I prefer
this
way
because it reflects the internal soul of human kindness and humanity.
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to feel
such
feedback one can cook some meals and share with people in need or help
neighbors
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to move something heavy together. In
conclusion
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I can say that these
support
ways
targeted to different goals and both important in different
ways
. For
me
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direct help is preferable because
it’s
the true
way
to give a hand to your friend or stranger and with some
practice
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it leads to great habits.
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