Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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Some people believe that happiness is difficult to find because we will be happy if we get
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achievement
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. Probably, it is considered with two main factors, facilities and expectations.
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achievement
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will be built by a facility and a high
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.
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, most people will feel unhappy because they believe that to show happiness they need to get their dream. Picture as, getting
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education is the high rate that people consider they had been a
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person. So that, if they cannot rich their higher certificate they will believe that they are not a happy person.
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,
achievement
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sometimes will be affected by a good facility and it will be encouraged by a high of
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expectation
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an expectation
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. As a matter of fact,
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of students outstanding take some courses to enhance their score at school level.
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, they can get the topic which will be thought earlier than other students so that, they can get a better result. In the
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they expect that they will be happy due to reaching higher education and get their future
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to be happy. In conclusion, people’s happiness will be determined by
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which depends on the facilities and
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expectation
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that they have.
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