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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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Some people believe that happiness is difficult to find because we will be happy if we get
achievement
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the achievement
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. Probably, it is considered with two main factors, facilities and expectations.
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achievement
 will be built by a facility and a high
expectation
.
Firstly
, most people will feel unhappy because they believe that to show happiness they need to get their dream. Picture as, getting
higher
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a higher
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 education is the high rate that people consider they had been a
success
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 person. So that, if they cannot rich their higher certificate they will believe that they are not a happy person.
Secondly
,
achievement
 sometimes will be affected by a good facility and it will be encouraged by a high of
expectation
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an expectation
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. As a matter of fact,
majority
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 of students outstanding take some courses to enhance their score at school level.
Additionally
, they can get the topic which will be thought earlier than other students so that, they can get a better result. In the
end
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 they expect that they will be happy due to reaching higher education and get their future
expectation
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 to be happy. In conclusion, people’s happiness will be determined by
achievement
 which depends on the facilities and
expectation
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expectations
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 that they have.
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