Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

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Children
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could make
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during their childhood. It is a discussion between some adults. Some believe that it is a wrong way to grow them up. I agreed that
children
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have the right of making
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and correct themselves.
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, making
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is the nature of the
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. Some believe that if
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do some jobs in the wrong way, they can understand how to solve the problems after that mistake.
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, toddlers learn to walk when they fell and stand up. It is the simplest example of the right of
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in childhood.
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destroying a toy can help them to think about how they can fix it and makes their mind distinguish.
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,
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could hurt them by their nature. Some
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are worse than they reveal in a moment. For ,example when a child under 2 years old use a knife, she/he might cut a part of her body and it will be so harmful. Even it might destroy their
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by cutting a finger or an eye. In ,addition its' psychological effects will be in the rest of their life. Not only
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them the opportunity of making
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hurt them buy
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it
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a big problem between them and their parents. Overall, if
children
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do not make a mistake either can not improve their abilities or learn how to solve a problem. So they face some
phisical
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.
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if they experience some bad
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they can not endure during their
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it might destroy their mind and body for the whole of life. Vanishing the
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is a
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point.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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