Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

Children
could make
misstep
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during their childhood. It is a discussion between some adults. Some believe that it is a wrong way to grow them up. I agreed that
children
have the right of making
fault
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faults
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and correct themselves.
Firstly
, making
mistakes
is the nature of the
children
. Some believe that if
children
do some jobs in the wrong way, they can understand how to solve the problems after that mistake.
for instance
, toddlers learn to walk when they fell and stand up. It is the simplest example of the right of
mistakes
in childhood.
Moreover
destroying a toy can help them to think about how they can fix it and makes their mind distinguish.
Secondly
,
mistakes
could hurt them by their nature. Some
mistakes
are worse than they reveal in a moment. For ,example when a child under 2 years old use a knife, she/he might cut a part of her body and it will be so harmful. Even it might destroy their
future
by cutting a finger or an eye. In ,addition its' psychological effects will be in the rest of their life. Not only
giving
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them the opportunity of making
mistakes
hurt them buy
also
it
cause
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a big problem between them and their parents. Overall, if
children
do not make a mistake either can not improve their abilities or learn how to solve a problem. So they face some
phisical
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physical
or mental problems in the
future
.
Although
if they experience some bad
mistakes
they can not endure during their
future
.
furthermore
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it might destroy their mind and body for the whole of life. Vanishing the
future
is a
second
point.
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