Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping Is it a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays people are more creative and innovative in making life easy.As technology evolves individuals make use of it,one example is online shopping.Access to order basic
neccesity
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necessity
can be done at home.
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it has a positive and negative
effect
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in
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the
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apply
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development. Purchasing a dress,food and even a brand new car can be made
thru
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online.Different varieties of online shopping are shown in
media
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the media
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.
For
example
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you can order a dress thru amazon without going to the branch of
store
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the store
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and be
recieved
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received
right away on your doorstep.Placing
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an order
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order
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orders
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in a flatform like
this
could
more
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convenience
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and can save money and time.When
pandemic
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the pandemic
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shock the world online shopping
become
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becomes
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popular,being safe is one of the priorities at home.Mall owners are summoned by the
goverment
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government
to downsize customers going to
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the mall
a mall
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mall
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malls
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.
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in store
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in-store
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shopping can be more selective and
qualititave
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qualitative
in nature.As a
customer
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,customer
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our main objective is to purchase
a
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apply
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quality goods and can be used in
longterm
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long term
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.
For
example
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buying a dress in-store shopping,you have a choice of checking the size the
color
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colour
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and the quality of materials used.Purchasing a car in a physical store and having a
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road test
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roadtest
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road test
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can be more
realible
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reliable
. In my conclusion both of them has
positive
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a positive
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and negative effect
such
as online shopping can bring comfort and safety
on
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to
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the customer but negative on the
otherhand
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other hand
that quality and choices
is
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being risk
likewise
on in-store shopping.
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