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Some people believe that products should be made to last as long as possible. Others think that products should be as cheap as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #products
World wide various goods are made by different producers and depending on their
quality
 , they may have a good halflife or they may malfunction very shortly.
Although
 some are arguing about producing very economical products without thinking about their
quality
 , I am for the best products with long-lasting use. With the development of the
worlwide
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worldwide
world
 economy ,
population
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the population
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 spend more on mechanical
items
. For ,example 30 years before , television is not very popular among Sri Lankans but now it becomes very popular. But the affordability for television among the
,
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apply
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populations vary significantly.
Therefore
 , most
people
 believe there should be very economical
items
 in the shops for everyone to get a television. But , these cheap
items
 are not lasting long and may need to replace frequently. Ultimately ,
people
 have to spend much more money than they deserve. Even though most
people
 think like that , more intelligent and educated ones think differently. They spend more on good
quality
items
 once and used
it
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them
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 for
long
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a long
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 time.
For example
 , when we consider automobiles , in Sri Lanka there are different brands of auto in the market. crowd
whom
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who
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spend on Toyota cars run more kilometres than other locally available cars. They spend a big money at once and get the advantage of that for years .
People
 who spend on cheap cars , most often spend their valuable time in garages with
there
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their
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 vehicles.
Therefore
 I think it is crucial to spend on good
quality
items
 which are long-lasting. In summary , even though most of the community arguing about spending less on brands , ultimate expenses will be high on cheap brands since they break easily. Considering other factors like time and travel I prefer to buy
quality
items
 despite their expenses .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • durability
  • sustainability
  • longevity
  • affordability
  • consumerism
  • waste
  • environmental impact
  • value for money
  • customer satisfaction
  • brand loyalty
  • consumption
  • economic growth
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