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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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It is believed that men and women should have the same educational opportunities.
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, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal numbers of male and female students in every
university
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 subject.
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 essay will explain why admitting the equal proportions of each
gender
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 in every major is impractical.
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, having the same number of men and women on all degree
courses
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 is simply unrealistic. Student numbers on any course depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a
university
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 decided to fill
courses
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qual
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number of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each
gender
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. In reality, many
courses
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 are more popular with one
gender
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 than the other.
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, nursing
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 tend to attract more female applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these
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 if fifty p
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of places are needed to go to males. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I believe that it would be unfair to base admission to
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courses
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 on
gender
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. Universities should continue to select the best candidates a
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their qualifications. In
this
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 way, both men and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that they will be successful if they work hard to achieve good grades at school. If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it would be wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications. In conclusion, the selection of
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 students should be based on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair to change to a selection procedure based on
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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