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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In many countries,it is necessary to own
the
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house
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than
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rent
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 it. The discussion will be presented in the
next
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 following paragraphs. There are many reasons why people are chosen to own a
house
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 rather than
rent
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 it. The rights for doing construction is
one
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 of the
priority
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priorities
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 why people get their own
house
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 because the renovation can occur easily.
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,during the celebration day
such
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 as Christmas,Halloween or even Easter day, the decoration is done by the owner of the
house
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conviniently
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conveniently
 than
rent
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one
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.
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 is why owning a living place is more beneficial than temporary.
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,in my opinion, I think
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 situation gives a negative effect on the country. Since the increasing number of new
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house
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houses
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 or
village
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villages
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 leads to the depreciation of space, It makes the area more crowded which gives disadvantages
on
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to
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the organization
an organization
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organization
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organizations
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. To illustrate, Japan is
one
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 of the examples of the world's best clean countries because the government can organize it easily since most of the Japanese
rent
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 the
house
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 or condominium-give limited areas for developing and cleaning.
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,renting can access
for
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apply
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better living conditions. In conclusion, buying
the
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a
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house
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 might get accessibility to do construction but renting
one
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 could give more benefits to society and countries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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