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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Disappearing so many languages has been occurring over the years. Though opinions are divided on the importance of
this
 issue, I agree with those who believe that
this
 ongoing trend will bring about a more convenient life for
people
. The advent of technology, especially the internet, has altered the lives of
people
 so that in the current era, communication with far-flung
people
 is much easier than that
of
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in the past. If
people
 around the world share the same
language
, they will be able to communicate with other nations and enjoy different facilities that may not be available in their
countries
. Globalization, the concept coincided with applying the new communicating applications leads to the accessibility to so many online courses. knowing English as the universal
language
 is an absolute necessity for participating in all of those classes. Albeit in several developed
countries
 English courses are occupied in the curriculum of their education systems, there are still a great wealth of realms in the globe that do not have these programs. The situation
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causes even the new generations of underdeveloped
countries
 not to benefit from the modern and advanced online courses.
Language
 barriers even appear more complicated when it comes to
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 to another country. No matter a person goes abroad for education, business, or just a holiday, communication with local
people
 will be a serious obstacle in several situations
such
 as training, negotiating, and shopping. It is reported that more than 80% of foreign students not only suffer from
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 in their classes but
also
 cannot properly convey their information
in
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 their lecturers. All of the mentioned problems would be solved easily if all
people
 around the world used the same
language
. In conclusion, I firmly believe that disappearing different languages that leads to using the same
language
 in all
countries
 will bring about a new avenue in the communication of
people
 which would be much more convenient than the existing one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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