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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,most of the healthcare services and universities expenses are pricey.some individuals suggest that maintaining health and education should be free.I think getting these advantages without money is valuable for some
people
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.At
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,poor families can take these benefits and
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 persons who are sick do not have stress for physician's bill. One of the most important problems for some
people
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 is that their income is not enough to afford their expenses,which can lead to withdrawal from treatment or study.If the authorities accept
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 spending,anxiety will decrease in low-income citizens.In ,Iran
people
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 should pay a huge part of their money to purchase medicine for sick persons which makes individuals be anxious and miserable when face with an illness.If the
government
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 pay the tutorial fee of the university for students who are from low economic families,most of them can study academic lessons which possibly leads to increasing financial status in these families in the future.
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, some
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 are as wealthy as can overcome these costs .They need to appreciate in some ways ,
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,discounting in their tax helps them to improve their business.
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,they will encourage to offer some monetary benefits to the
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 for enhancing healthcare systems or educational programs.
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,in Iran,companies owners built some hospitals in rural areas for women who need to care during the pregnancy period to decline the mortality of pregnant women and infants in that places. In conclusion,expanding health and education among
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 who have poverty is the duty of the
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 while,rich individuals have enough money, they can involve in some volunteer activities in order to assist the ministries .
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,the
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 should support these charities by decreasing their taxes.
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