“Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are equally responsible for solving this problem” To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Currently, many

kids

get ill-health around the world. To overcome

this

tragedy, each party who are academies and guardians should

similarly

be responsible for

this

matter. I strongly agree with the argument and

this

easy will elaborate the idea. While the whole world has a competition for everything, youngsters

also

become a part of it. Due to that education institutions are required to bloom the best pupils from their

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.

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, become

highest ranking

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students from exams, best debate team and

also

them to become best athletes from their

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, etc.

As a result

of

this

,

schooling

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age is the most overloaded era of each person’s life.

Furthermore

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parents

also

need their

kids

to be the best of the world as they force them to follow extra educational sources apart

of

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school

such

as physically and online materials. The worst thing is

children

have to go through

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huge stress with many diseases like severe

headache

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, low vision and even diabetes. Due to that both colleges and parents have

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same liability to save

children

.

Nevertheless

, the

kids

where they are in out of the home

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have some bad habits. To illustrate, they tend to have

much

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sweets and fast foods without any control as it is a habit of that age limit.

Moreover

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this

kind of habitat cause

to

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get them not well always and many of them become hyperactive. Since

kids

also

should have their own limitations to be healthy. To conclude, according to my point of view, the higher workload and strain which are given by educational

centers

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and parents on

children

may cause to create a less healthy life pattern though

children

have some bad habits.