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To meet the growing needs of food for the increasing population, country should make use of edible insects as foods. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but affect negatively the nature too. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The growth of the population results in food shortages. In order to tackle the issue, some people recommend permitting edible insects as food, while opponents argue, it wouldn’t be favourable to natural habitats
also
 it could harm humans healthy lifecycle. We will discuss
further
 on
this
 topic and list out pros and cons.
First
, advantages of including insects in meals - may reduce deforestation and will give options to try other foodstuffs,
instead
 of depending on one type. Nowadays, in order to fulfil human's needs, especially eating, many forests have been destroyed continuously to expand agricultural land. A majority of society reply to meets for their day-to-day intake, which causes killing abundant of animals, noticeably, beef and chicken. These two could have been regulated if we have an alternative source.
For instance
, in ASIA - in many rural areas, the public don't rely only on meat, they utilize the other natural editable creatures to balance out the need.
Second
, disadvantages -
although
 the suggestion seems like a positive solution but does it really a solution? increasing people on the world will never go down, it is evident that it always raises. If people try to balance satisfy human needs, it will be a huge drawback for other living things. We all know, one creature is relying on another one for survival. When humans start consuming all edible things from nature, other living things will not have anything to survive,
thus
result
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 the extinction of animals, birds & plants.
Furthermore
, scientists will start bioresearch, and we all end up having factory-made insects.
For instance
, chickens -
initially
 we all consumed the original version of it and later in order to compensate for the need we have been introduced with generic changed chicks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • edible insects
  • increasing population
  • food needs
  • unhealthy
  • negatively affect
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • nutritional value
  • sustainable
  • efficient
  • abundant
  • accessible
  • economic benefits
  • culinary diversity
  • social acceptance
  • cultural acceptance
  • allergies
  • health concerns
  • environmental impact
  • ethical considerations
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