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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books
Modern e-books and e-newspapers are considered
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two of the most functional technological advances which deliver
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numerous count of pros from saving the environment to features like searching and saving without occupying any physical space. Despite the mentioned advantages, I reckon that they will not completely eliminate the hardcopies
due to
 some reasons which I am going to explain. On the one hand, there is mounting evidence that more
people
 are being attracted to read online versions of publications. In
this
 sense, a huge
number
 of websites have been established to provide readers with online content including books, newspapers, magazines and so on
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 their
number
 of visitors
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 soaring yearly.
Similarly
, the
number
 of printed publications
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 on a declining trend because of the positives mentioned above.
For instance
, the proportion of online publications from famous publishers in the US grew from 40 per cent ten years ago to 70 per cent in the current year.
On the contrary
,
due to
 a
number
 of inevitable hassles associated with online content, they do not seem to overwhelm their old rivals. They need to be accessed on a digital gadget
that is
 not available everywhere and every time.
In addition
,
people
 with disabilities would experience hardship reading on a monitor or a
cellphone
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.
Not to mention
 that there are plenty of traditional and old-fashioned
people
 who prefer to save the nostalgia of reading printed matters.
For example
, elderly
people
 who
used to
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 read printed books for
long
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 years do not like to use digital
book-readers
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 and tablets to read them.
Above all
, despite the allegation, some online
contents
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are
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 not free and
people
 should pay to read them. All in all,
although
 the amount of digital content is increasing dramatically, I do not agree that they will fully eradicate the traditional ones because of some unresolvable restrictions associated with them.
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Writing Style
Try to avoid repetition of words or phrases. For example, 'online content' has been mentioned multiple times and could detract from reader engagement.
Content
Consider showing a more balanced view by discussing both sides equally in depth. The disadvantages of digital reading materials were discussed more extensively.
Structure
Ensure that your opinion is clear throughout the essay. While it's clear by the end of the essay that you disagree with the statement, your position could be made clearer in the introduction to guide reader understanding.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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