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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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The quantity of
success
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 is always measured by richness and other multitudes of material things. But in my opinion, accomplishment is not just about making money,
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, it is more about living life with a sense of fulfilment on a deeper level. Most
people
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 do not understand the difference between
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 and wealth, so their main goal in life is to become richer.
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, they realize that even if they do manage to get rich, it will never give them a real sense of accomplishment. If
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 had been true, the only happy
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 who would have been in society would be rich
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. Despite
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, we observe that every segment of society experiences happiness and successful feelings. Another misconception about accomplishment is to compare achievement is
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 to be reached.
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 is why most
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 think of
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 as a goal, my opinion is that, so
success
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 should not be an aim but it is an instrument to be happy. So, if you have money and yet you are unhappy, it is doubtful how long you will experience the feeling of
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