Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some people believe that a certificate from complete high school should have right to they want to study. From my point of view, I agree with
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they like.
Besides
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, other people think teenagers can not stand or direct their education by themselves. To being with, I strongly agree with students should have
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to learn. So, having
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to choose what one likes can bring many
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.
In addition
, undergraduates will
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from courses they want to.
For instance
, some students can self-knowledge and find their passion to do the best thing. One another reason, they will develop their own specific skills and already to want they need to learn in college.
Additionally
, teenagers will improve for his or her
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courses and can
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for their future.
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the freshman
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freshman
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desire to
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doctor they take science and mathematics for their study.
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their specific skills to education in the future.
On the other hand
, in school should have a teacher to suggest someone cannot totally sure what they like
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as the USA undergraduate can choose
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to study and they have a teacher help to identify at the same. In summary, I personally agree with
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viewpoint because it seems to me that the advantages of a scholar have to pick courses
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they like. There are many
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for
ready
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to learn and career in the future.
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