In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Most of the people believe that nowadays most of the
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colleges and
schools
educating both the
sex
in
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school, While others claim that
students
will benefit if they studied in
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sex
school rather than mixed. I partially agree with
this
statement for educating in mixed
schools
give more equity within girls and boys, while studying separately provide
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relationship within both the
sex
.
Firstly
, I am writing about the
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of being part of mixed
schools
.
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will
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more
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and the quality of trust between
students
.
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I mean,
students
can understand each other well and can be help-full,
also
this
teaches them how to behave with a boy or girl and most of the chance student will get to know more about their pain and problems and
this
will lead to
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more about their parents and siblings.
For example
, nowadays if you look internationally many of us have mixed friends and we know how to treat them in a way
Secondly
, the advantage of being study in
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sex
schools
.
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between
students
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cross the limit and they will not concentrate on their studies. Here what I
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say is that if a girl and boy
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to study together parent will not allow them because they know the consequence. most of the
students
went wrong because of mixed
schools
in many places around the world.
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nowadays can real many newspapers convey
students
in a relationship in grade five itself and these kids will not understand what their doing is correct or wrong. In conclusion, educating
students
in mixed school teach them the
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and value of
verieties
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varieties
of people,
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studying in
single
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single-sex
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sex
college or
schools
will bring more culture
disicipline
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discipline
between the
students
. in my
opinion
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both of the
system
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have their unique way of
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and
disadvantage
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • collaboration
  • gender equality
  • peer pressure
  • personal development
  • academic performance
  • social skills
  • traditional roles
  • creative thinking
  • critical thinking
  • self-confidence
  • peer interaction
  • curriculum
  • learning environment
  • academic success
  • gender segregation
  • academic needs
  • equal opportunities
  • competitive environment
  • extracurricular activities
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