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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some propose that the governments should rather carry out and control
the
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scientific
research
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instead
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 of
the
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private
companies
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.
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 it is important that scientific
research
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 is controlled by governments, I disagree and
instead
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 think it is
also
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 significant that private
companies
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 should get the freedom to carry out some
research
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. On the
one
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 hand, if scientific
research
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 is only carried out by the
government
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, they can guarantee the quality of the
research
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. As there will be just
one
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government
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 agency
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 follows the rules, which are stated by the ministry.
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, they
also
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 have better contact with people working for the
government
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.
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, if the outcome of a scientific
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 study is that there is bird disease in a region,
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 they can easily report
this
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 to the
government
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.
This
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 can ensure that measurements are taken faster.
However
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, it is
also
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 important that there are academics who work for private
companies
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 so that/because there are different perspectives on a specific topic.
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, each private company has its own method of doing
research
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.
This
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 can lead to a variety of outcomes to
one
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 subject, which is
also
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 important.
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, during the covid pandemic, different private
companies
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 worked on making a vaccine against the virus and because of the different methods each company followed, they developed a formula for the vaccine faster/quickly. If they just followed
one
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 method which was carried out by the
government
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, it would have taken longer. In conclusion, despite the fact that the quality of
research
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 is guaranteed when it is carried out by the
government
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, private
companies
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 are
also
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 important for generating different perspectives

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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