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Celebrity status no longer equates with talent/accomplishments. Discuss and give opinion

#celebrity #status #talent #accomplishments
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In today's society, celebrity
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 refers to someone who has gained some kind of popularity, whether minor or major. It is common to see several of these persons come and go.
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, long-term viability is critical. I completely agree with the premise that a famous person's accomplishments do not always correspond to their
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. the list of accomplishments bestowed upon people who richly merited it in
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 manner. Nowadays, the majority of celebrities are overrepresented in the music and film industries, since the fame
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 is imposed indiscriminately on those who are recognised just for their appearances,
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 as top models and television personalities.Talent and accomplishment are rarely a part of the celebrity equation.
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, children of prominent actors instantly gain stardom just because they have a background. On other hand, in the past decades, the star value is has gained different for the politicisation, social workers and influencers
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 individuals are earned the labels by sheer hard work and dedication
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 can not be ignored. there are outstanding and genuine talents who need recognition as a celebrity.
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, actors who empower the film industry nowadays have been consistently working hard to achieve
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 position. To conclude, Instante fame from any silly stunt or reality show popularity never
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 long,
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 there are true talents that can not be ignored as well,
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 it is comtempery world people should carefully analyze and judge the personality before we follow and make them as a star or tag them as personality
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