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nowadays, its common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

#people #children #thirties #trend #benefit #society
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In today's modernised world
people
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 are getting married and have offspring in their life at the age of their thirties
instead
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 of in adulthood . I totally agree with the notion , I will elaborate it in the forthcoming paragraph. Getting married and having an heir is a critical decision , a tiny mistake and it can ravage your marriage life and future of the
child
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 .so it's important to have enough knowledge and maturity about upbringing your
child
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 . One should think about their heir when they had decided about their family planning and the future of the
child
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 .
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 ,
people
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 are financially stable in their thirties so that they grant better education and teach them ethics , manners and moral values to their
child
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 . Most
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people
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 don't consider their financial problems and it can only affect their
child
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 . Once you had enough experience it can
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 help in upbringing your beloving heir . An experienced and mature person efficiently operate the
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tantrum
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 of children patiently and sensibly. Several inexperienced
people
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 can't handle the
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tantrum
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 of their children patiently and rebuke them or even hit them which can eventually affect the mental health of the
child
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 and self-abuse himself ,which can be very hazardous for the
child
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic stability
  • financial security
  • mature decision making
  • life goals
  • child welfare
  • emotionally equipped
  • population growth control
  • resource management
  • environmental sustainability
  • changing social norms
  • traditional timelines
  • personal freedom
  • social diversity
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