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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 believe that the existence of printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 will
out
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be out
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 of the market in the future
due to
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 the accessibility of online reading
materials
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 without spending any money on it.
However
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, I strongly disagree with the statement
due to
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 the different skills of automation usage between old and young generations
as well as
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person's
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a person's
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 desire
in reading
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to read
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. First and foremost, old society finds it hard to read
books
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 or
newspapers
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 virtually
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 their physical condition and skill in using
the
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technology
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.
In other words
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,
books
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 and
newspapers
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are needed
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 to be printed for these generations so they can cope with the recent pieces of information.
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, my grandparents find it
struggle
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 to read the information even from the television
due to
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 their eyes are not sufficient enough to read everything from the screen. They get used to
the
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printed
books
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 and reading
materials
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 so they
found
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find
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 it even harder if they need to read everything online.
Besides
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,
technology
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 is not something that they are familiar with
hence
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this
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 will
bring
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 another issue
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arises
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.
Therefore
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, no matter how advanced and affordable the
technology
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 towards the existence of reading
materials
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, some
people
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 will keep buying printed
books
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 or
newspapers
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 in the future including my grandparents.
Secondly
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, personal preference in reading creates many possibilities whether the reading
materials
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 are available online or offline. What I am trying to say is that everyone has their own way of choosing the most convenient way to read, so it can be hard if the market
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only
having
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has
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 one option; online reading.
Moreover
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, some societies tend to enjoy reading printed
books
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 compared to virtual ones ,especially for parents. My parents,
for instance
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, never brought any virtual
book
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books
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 at home or at
the
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reading time because they tried to minimize the use of gadgets for their children. So, despite its personal choice, it is
also
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 another benefit
in
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 reading
hard copy
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hard-copy
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books
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 or
newspapers
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. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that no one will buy printed
books
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 or
newspapers
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 in the future because old
people
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 find it hard to read on-screen and
personal's
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personal
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 preference.
Instead
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, it will be more
people
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 who prefer to read in a traditional way to decrease their frequency
in
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of
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 using the
technology
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.

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Grammatical Accuracy
There are some language errors, such as 'the existence of printed newspapers or books will out of the market', which should be 'printed newspapers or books will be out of the market'. Also, be careful with your sentence structures. For example, 'my grandparents find it struggle to read the information', which should be 'my grandparents struggle to read the information'.
Task Fulfillment
It would be better to give more statistical or factual evidence to further strengthen your supporting arguments.
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