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Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in their exams should be rewarded. Other say that those who show progress should be rewarded. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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It is often held that rewarding
students
 will encourage them to study more. While some people argue that awards should be given to academic
toppers
, others believe that it was given to
students
 who showed improvement in their scores.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. On the one hand, achievements and honour encourage
students
 to
work
 hard for the highest scores. Everyone loves medals
toppers
 are no different. When schools appreciate them with prizes, they will get motivated and try to improve themselves.
Moreover
, other
students
 get inspired by the
toppers
 and try to
work
 hard for the prize.
For instance
, in a college when the
first
 three ranks get a reward but the fourth rankers missed it with one mark He/She works better to get the award in the
next
 examination.
On the other hand
, there are a few
students
 who should be recognized by the institutions who
work
 hard to good marks and improve them gradually according to their own talent.
Toppers
 are not only the ones who should be appreciated. The
students
 who show progress must be awards for their hard
work
 by that itself they feel motivated and try to
work
 even harder. In my opinion,
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 feel both the
toppers
 and the
students
 who show progress should be rewarded by that they will get inspired and try to become studious to win the prizes. If rewards were only given to
toppers
 other
students
 assume that those prizes are not for them. In conclusion, rewards are given for a reason. when someone appreciates for efforts we try even harder to reach the highest scores. Awards are something that motivates us to improve ourselves in different aspects. So, rewards are meant for the
students
 who
work
 hard and show progress in their performance.
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