Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
increasing
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amount of processed
food
usage with extreme
sugar
content is one of the main
reason
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of
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uprising health issues
such
as obesity,
diabeties
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diabetes
and
hearth
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problems. To decrease the consumption of these kinds of
foods
and beverages,
rising
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the
prices
is seen as an effective precaution.
This
essay agrees that changing
prices
can discourage individuals to eat or drink more
sugar
.
This
essay will
first
suggest that rising
prices
leads
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to declining demands and
then
argue that it creates an incentive to switch
healty
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healthy
health
options. The extreme usage of junk
foods
is related to low
prices
which make them affordable for
less
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whealthy
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wealthy
healthy
part
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of
the
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society.
Additionally
, these humans are the most
vulnurables
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vulnerable
against
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health issues caused by unhealthy
foods
. Since increasing sugary
food
prices
affects directly the accessibility by
this
part of the society, the health problems related to
sugar
consumption can decline automatically. One of the most related
example
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of
this
subject is
organic
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food
market, as the
prices
are unreachable,
less
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people can eat up. Another positive effect of
high
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processed
food
prices
is supporting the mentality and
behavior
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change against
to
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these
foods
. people believe that
preapering
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preparing
a meal requires
excessive
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amount of time and it is not tasty as much as manufactured
foods
, they do not even try.
Moreover
, considering being exposed to
sugar
for a long time creates
an addictions
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,
quiting
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quitting
quite
it can require an external force. Due to increased
prices
, individuals can find
necessary
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motivation to discover healthy, easy and
delicous
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delicious
options.
For instance
, in 2010, a tax law on cigarettes is brought into force in Europe,
then
a
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researched
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conducted by a German University showed that the number of
smoker
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fell sharply
in
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a
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short notice and they found new resources to control their stress levels.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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