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Band 7.5

Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter * mention the food and service * explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere * suggest any improvements to make things better

Dear Manager, My name is Harnish, and
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 Saturday I visited your restaurant with my friends to celebrate my birthday. I am writing
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 letter to send you a genuine appreciation , as we really enjoyed our
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 at your place.
Firstly
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, the food that we ordered was amazing, and one of the dishes which we all loved the most was paneer tikka.
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 delicacy was prepared to perfection , and we were really impressed with the taste.
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, all the other dishes like biryani, cocktails, and pizzas were phenomenal.
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, the way your staff served us was memorable as they made us feel special. They were doing small things like having a great conversation with us, and
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 giving us some complimentary sweets , which made our day special.
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, the interiors were really beautiful, and
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 made us enjoy our
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 the most. Everything was up to the mark, but I would like to suggest some things which will take your restaurant one notch higher. The main thing to improve is the service
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, as the dishes were taking a long
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 to be served.
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, the menu was very limited, and adding more varieties
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 be great to attract a larger number of people with different preferences. Once again, thank you for your great service, and we will visit again soon. Kind Regards, Harnish

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coherence
Try to put one main idea in each paragraph and use a clear link to the next idea.
coherence
Start with a short hello and end with a small sign off.
coherence
Split the text into parts where each part holds one idea.
task
Be sure to say all main points: food, service, mood, and how to get better; end with thanks.
tone
Keep a kind tone and not too long sentences.
content
The letter names good food and good service.
tone
The tone is kind and polite.
closing
The writer says thanks and says he will visit again.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exceptional service
  • culinary delights
  • intriguing ambiance
  • meticulous attention
  • flavorful concoctions
  • impeccable presentation
  • charming decor
  • ambient music
  • constructive feedback
  • vegetarian options
  • seating arrangement
  • heartfelt appreciation
  • wholeheartedly recommend
  • return visit
  • enhance the experience
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