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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared feely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, we can find lots of
information
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 on the internet or various kinds of media. Some
people
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 hold that sharing
information
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 with the public can bring benefits to
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world
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 while others think that some
information
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 is too valuable that can’t be shared freely.
This
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 essay discusses both sides and will give my opinion.
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, it is true that sharing as much
information
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 as the public can have a positive effect on
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world
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. The biggest benefit is that through those
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people
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have learned different kinds of knowledge and can find
information
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 quickly without consuming lots of time.
For example
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, just search on the internet we can find any kinds of
information
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 we need for working studying or even for living. That
information
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 can let our life become more convenient and more efficiently.
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, some
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such
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 as business research can let our economy develop more quickly.
On the other hand
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, those
people
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 who hold that some
information
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 is too valuable that can’t be shared feely is
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 a strong standing. It is important to let
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 understand some knowledge is valuable and we need to pay some payments to those researchers. If we shared
those valuable
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information
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 as free it might let some researchers dislike sharing their
information
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 with the public.
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, valuable
information
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 will decrease and will bring negative impacts to the
world
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. In conclusion, sharing
information
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 with the public can have a positive effect on
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world
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such
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 as benefits our live or economic development.
However
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, in my opinion, I agree that there are some valuable
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 need to be paid. So that there will have more
information
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 be shared and will have more and more
people
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 like to share their
information
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 with the public.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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