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Some people belive that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of a bad's person nature. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is an argued that whether some public thinks that social problems and poverty generate
crime
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 in society, whereas others believe that it is due to persons bad intentions. I personally go with the former statement because everything links with each other which discuss in the
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, the social problem and poverty give birth to
crime
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 because everyone wants a comfortable
life
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 but, sometimes
people
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 do not have accisavilty to get that thing, they indulge in
crimes
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, according to a survey, it shows that 90% of criminals do
crimes
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 because they do have enough source in their
life
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 like education and money, that's why they choose the wrong path which destroys their future. So that, the government should make a law basic education will be necessary for everyone so, they can decide the right path in their
life
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.
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, sometimes
people
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 do
crimes
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 for their bad nature as well as wrong intentions because everyone wants success overnight but,
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 is not possible in real
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.
Therefore
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, they get
punishment
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 for their
crime
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.
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, the UK university report shows that most criminals commit
crimes
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 to get money easily without thinking about the consequences of the
crime
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.
People
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 don't think about doing mudders as well. In conclusion,
although
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 sometimes
crimes
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 are done due to the bad intentions of the public, it is not neglected that the
crime
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 rate is increased because of fewer resources for
people
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 to improve their
life
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. the government should make laws to decrease poverty and social issue so,
people
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 can live a better
life
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.

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