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Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been very negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion

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There is no doubt that technology has changed our life.some individuals comment that these
changes
 are very useful for
people
 ,
however
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 others think that it is negative.in my point of view despite, some drawbacks in
this
 change it is important to human life.
this
 essay sped lightly both of positive, negative
statement
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. On the one hand, there are many advantages to these
changes
,especially education. impact some years ago
people
 only used books and face to face classes for their studies but current days many study materials and instruments have discovered.
thus
people
 can get more knowledge through these.
for instance
 if student correct their practice tests they don't get help from others and they can find the answer through the technology apps
such
 as youtube, webpages
On the other hand
although
 several advantages in these
changes
, they are some disadvantages that.due to the new building appearance, many trees are cut down by
people
.
as a result
 some birds and animals live suffered much as well
people
 have to face many problems,
furthermore
 if many car usages in cities , which release annoying sounds it affects the human rest times To sum up
although
 some advantages in
this
changes
, we can get several benefits for these.
however
 movement should stop cut down trees.
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