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Q: Some people say that at all levels of education, from primary school to university, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#q #people #levels #education #school #university #time #facts #skills
The vast majority of
population
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 argued that education is primarily composed of theoretical subjects , rather than practices.
Furthermore
, professors and lecturers do not concentrate on improving
skills
 and often provide
huge
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 volume of data and figures. I agree with
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the opinion
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 of most people and
same
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the same
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 will explain in
further
 paragraphs. Studying thesis knowledge is an important prospect
that is
 essential for
child
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a child
the child
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 to learn but it should be backed up by real examples and practical knowledge of daily
life
.
Moreover
, apart from
classes
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,classes
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 there should be sessions
which
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that
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 include puzzles and physical work to improve the mental strength of learners.
Additionally
, it is very important that students should relate or apply the concepts they learn at school
life
 in
real
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real-life
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life
 scenarios which will
also
 improve
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 thinking capabilities at
very
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a very
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 young age.
Besides
this
, even at
university
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the university
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 level teaching stuff should be related to
corporate
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the corporate
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 world so it could help the student to get
good
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a good
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 job or in their business.
For instance
, learning a computer language won’t be enough unless there is
proper
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a proper
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 practice session involved.
In addition
 to
this
, we have often seen job applicants who are very good at academics but due to lack of
skills
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,skills
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 they got rejected in the interviews.
Moreover
, candidates which are lack
of
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apply
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interpersonal and communication
skills
 are always considered as weak pillars of the organisation. In conclusion, learning about facts and concepts is useful only if students
knows
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know
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 how to apply them in different situations.
Thus
, educational institutions
makes
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make
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 sure that mentors and teachers will equally support soft
skills
, analytical thinking and
problem solving
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problem-solving
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 session of
real
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real-life
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life
 with relevant examples.
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