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The Growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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The fast
raising
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 of e-commerce will someday lead to many stores
to be
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 bankrupt and
close
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closing
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 in towns and cities. I strongly agree to some
extend
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 that modern technology of
modern
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the modern
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 world and having a convenient
life
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are
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the
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 reason in some manner.
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 of all, modern technology
are
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 one of the main reason
of
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for
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 growing online shopping. Many
programmer
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programmers
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 are creating
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an application
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application
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applications
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 to help online shopping owner to sell their product and goods.
Programmer
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also
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create
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 e-pay to pay the transaction.
Basically
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 all the
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application
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applications
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 and software are created with the use of
internet
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the internet
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.
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Application
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The application
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 can easily access by
the
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people
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 with the use of
computer
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a computer
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 or cellphone.
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, Shein is one of
leading
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the leading
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application
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applications
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 for online shopping which they
sale
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 clothes, accessories at home and other miscellaneous. As result, many individuals are fond of buying and choosing
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a product
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product
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products
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 on
this
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application
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.
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,
stress free
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life
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 of shopping is one of the greatest
achievement
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achievements
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 that individuals want. Online shopping
save
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 the
people
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 who had a longer of worker and no time to go out
for
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shopping. Today, pandemic make all the
people
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 stay at home that lead the physical shops and store to
closed
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close
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 and
the
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apply
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e-commerce
make
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makes
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 human
life
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 much lighter
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than
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that
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than
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 before.
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, picking
a
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apply
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clothes or product is just
on
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one
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 click from your devices and it will send to you
door steps
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doorsteps
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 just a matter of time and day.
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,
people
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 feel
more safe
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to
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apply
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not
going
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go
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 out to shop, just
stay
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staying
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 at home and
have
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having
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 a grocery. In conclusion,
modern
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the modern
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 world increasing
the
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apply
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e-commerce and make
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life
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the life
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 of
people
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 carefree but it lead to many stores in
town
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towns
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 and cities closure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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