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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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There is no doubt that illiteracy is a great concern, especially in low-income countries where people are most at risk. There are several reasons for
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, and a number of damaging effects, which we will discuss here. Possibly the major factor is having parents who are illiterate. When parents are illiterate, they usually do not give
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 their children’s
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 it has accelerated the rise of illiteracy levels. The second key cause is
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child labour. Many children in underdeveloped countries (
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 as South Sudan, Niger, Mali, etc.) skip
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 and try to get a job so that they help in fending for their families. A third factor is a social or cultural priority. In some nations, especially in
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 of Islamic religion, boys are allowed to go to school, but girls remain at home. We can see
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 clearly in Pakistan where the Tehrik-i-Taliban Pakistan had banned girls from attending school. The effects on the unfortunate victims can be quite devastating.
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, those who are illiterate have a low self-esteem. Studies have proven that people who are educated have higher confidence levels compared to people with little or no
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. The other main effect could be an increase in poverty levels. It means that the
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 of job-seekers
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 higher than less skilled jobs, which can lead to a reduction in wages
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 decline in
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standard of living.
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, youth employment, and some priorities seem to be the main causes, and they influence both individuals and the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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