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Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama, and creative writing are an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with your statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

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Globalization
 opened new opportunities to national and international
companies
 in developed and developing nations. Everyone considers
this
 as a new step towards a completely different world. When the term
globalization
 was coined
initially
, it attracted much criticism worldwide, mostly from economists.
Nevertheless
, slowly it has been accepted widely.
However
, some people believe that it produces positive
effects
 for everyone. I agree with
this
 statement to a certain extent.
To begin
 with,
globalization
 has many advantages. It is beneficial for the economic development of not-so-developed countries. When multinational
companies
 start their business in
such
 regimes, there will be many employment opportunities and infrastructure development results.
Moreover
, local
companies
also
 benefit from
this
 by supplying the raw materials to find a global market for their products. On top of that, the state gets tremendous money as taxes and legal fees from these
companies
. On the flip side of the coin, it has some adverse
effects
 too.
First
 of all, international
companies
 do not give much importance to the environmental
effects
 they are causing in the host countries.
Besides
, increased competition from multinational
companies
 may affect the local industries, and sometimes it might result in the closedown of some decades-old local businesses.
Furthermore
, these so-called
companies
 are mighty in finance and influence;
this
 might control a country's entire resources. That eventually creates a monopoly and unfair trade practices. To recapitulate,
Globalization
 provides a lot of sound
effects
 if we think in more sweeping terms, but we cannot generalize these
effects
 as positive to everyone. Just like every system, it
also
 has some adverse
effects
. So, the governments should keep an eye on everything when they open their economy to the world market.
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