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Although more and more people read the news on internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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The digital report has created a great impact on
readers
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readers'
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 habits.Some groups believe that most people opt for newspapers as their main source of
getting
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information
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 rather than reading
news
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 on the internet. I completely disagree with the statement and In
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Firstly
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, online reports will provide an up to date
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.Indeed, newspapers are printed one day before , so they can publish
information
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accordingly
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 .
On the other hand
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 , online data is updated frequently ,which
help
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helps
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 them to provide the accurate and latest data to the readers.
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, All top leading online reporters in India update their
story
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stories
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every 1 hour and publish
it
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them
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 on their
website
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websites
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.
Therefore
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 , the public
opt
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 for the latest
news
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 , in spite of yesterday's
news
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On the other hand
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, Digital
news
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 is very affordable
while
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 compared to the monthly subscription
cost
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 of paper.The online platforms always provide some great offers to readers to urge them into it.At the same time newspaper agent put fixed rental charges which
cost
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 10 times higher than online
news
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.
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,An average monthly bill
of
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for
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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will
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costs
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cost
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 around 200 Rupees in India,
whereas
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 some social
news
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 channels provide their monthly subscription at 50 rupees,Obviously, it tends customers to switch their mode online.
On the contrary
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,Some populations still use newspapers as the main source of
information
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,especially for aged groups.One of the reasons behind
this
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 is they are not convenient to use social platforms, they
feel
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find it
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 very difficult to assess them.Another reason is they are well concerned about health because reading through digital platforms will affect eyesight , which sometimes results in serious health problems.
To conclude
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, digital
news
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urge
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 customers into it because of
their
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its
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 updated
news
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 and affordable subscription
cost
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.
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