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many people like to go on holiday abroad,while others believes to visit places within their own country. discuss both views and give your opinion

Some individuals
enjoys
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 travelling to a foreign land for their vacation, others prefer to use theirs within their
enviroments
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environments
environment
.
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 essay will discuss both views with explanation and give examples, but in my own perspective, it will be a memorable event if
break
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the break
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 period can be spent far away from home. Having a vacation in a familiar
enviroment
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environment
 gives someone
opportunity
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 to explore better at a low cost in a timely manner when
comparing
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 with the cost and time of planning to have
break
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 in international places.
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 year festive period I was chanced to spent it with my family and since we did not plan moving out of our homey
enviroment
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environment
, expenses were minimal and kids were able to catch funs and the whole household ensured they visit different areas of choice.
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 would not have been possible if the whole clan is to travel far away from home
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 can
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 be done during weekends when everyone
are
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 free.
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,
athough
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although
though
 it might be expensive touring far and wide, but it
worth
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is worth
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 it because of the additional information.
Traveling
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Travelling
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 overseas will enable people to have knowledge of
various
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the various
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 cultural
background
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backgrounds
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 and
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 give adequate room for relaxation and enjoyment as distraction and disturbance are out of the way. A typical example was the time my husband went on break for a month out of his native home, no one could
disturbed
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 him for emergency work in
office
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the office
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 as his mobile line was unreachable and he
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 gave
account
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an account
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 of different delicacies he ate when he was away with distinct dressing mode which he might not have had the
opportiunity
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opportunity
 of knowing if he stayed back in
is
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his
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nation
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a nation
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. Going on
trip
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a trip
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 worldwide gives someone
an
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the
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 added advantage of updating knowledge. In conclusion, native sojourner
have
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has
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 time to stopover at many spots for adventure but using off period overseas enable people to gain extra awareness.

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