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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A portion of the society argues that cost
airlines
 give more opportunities for most
community
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 worldwide to travel. At the same time, other's in society believe the fact that
,
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these cost
airlines
 should be removed from the services as they may contribute much to
air
pollution
.
Although
 it is true that these transport can contribute to atmosphere
pollution
 to a certain extent, it is not limited to these
budget
flights
. these
budget
flights
 are doing great work for developing countries and contributed much to the tourist industry worldwide. in my opinion , these cheap
air
flights
 should be kept.
To begin
 with, humans are love
to
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sailing
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 and
explore
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nature. it is common for all humans. most ordinary communities around nature are unable to offer expensive transport and depend on
budget
flights
. they contribute much to the tourism industry worldwide. As evidence , recent research published in India revealed , most of the local tourists use
budget
flights
 rather than charted
flights
 to travel locally as well as internationally. when we consider
air
pollution
 , it is common for any machine that uses fossil fuel as an energy source .
flights
 including
budget
 as well as charter
flights
 around the world using fossil fuel for their engines. according to recent research done in the UK , the contribution to
air
pollution
 is high by aeroplanes but, charted
flights
 contributed much to compare to
budget
flights
 since they have more flying times. In conclusion , most people around the world benefited from cheap
airlines
 to travel around the world while they contributed less to
air
pollution
 compared to charted
flights
 . as
such
this
 writer totally agrees with the fact that
budget
airlines
 contribute much to ordinary people.
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