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Advertising is all around us, it's an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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You can see many advertisings for some items that you might like or dislike in your whole day. Most
companies
 advertise their
products
 because they want to be more successful in their business. There are some advantages of advertising.
First
, one advantage is that advertising could help
companies
 that want to find more customers interested in buying their
products
.
Also
, they always will help customers because
advertisements
 are usually shown where to find the
products
. Another advantage is that your company will be more profitable if you promote what you sell. Of course, there are many disadvantages. Those
companies
 that want to promote their product will need to pay for the
advertisements
.
However
, not every company have enough money to do that. Another disadvantage is that many people can be annoyed by those
advertisements
 and decide not to buy their
products
. So, in conclusion, I would like to say that too many
advertisements
 could be bad for the company and the customers. The customer would be annoyed, and
companies
 would lose their money.
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