A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people believe that economic and social status are the factors to value an individual's worth today, and

honour

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compassion

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belief

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, tend to be classified as

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values and are no longer essential in assessing someone else worth.

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, I strongly disagree with the statement because well-being and self-respect are the long-lasting aspects that all human

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to have. First of all, I believe that kindness and

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are more valuable than money or reputation.

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, being kind to others has no limit of time or value

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money or popularity can be gone at any time. Even when a star dies, what people tend to remember is not how famous or rich she was but her kindness and

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, what defines civilization in the

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world is not social or

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status but more

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the behaviour of individuals.

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believe what makes us different from any other animals are our well-being, dignity, and

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, these aspects are more crucial than any material possessions are there.

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, self-respect and

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are other great keys to valuing someone's worth. Because life is to experience, and

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what makes us honourable and trustworthy beings. My point is, in order to gain respect and

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, the individual needs to undergo lots of struggle and difficulty that could carry on their entire life which is incompatible with material possessions

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as money or recognition which can be gained and disappear at any time.

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, Nelson Mandela was a person that we still remember today because of his contribution and

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towards human rights to fight racism.

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, I believe

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and

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are irreplaceable compared to any person's wealth. In conclusion,

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it might sound old-fashioned to judge

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accordance with their kindness,

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, and

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, I strongly disagree that those aspects are no longer essential in today's era which some people believe could be replaced by an individual's wealth and reputation.

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task response

Overall, your essay addresses the prompt effectively and presents a clear argument against the importance of social status and material possessions in determining an individual's worth. However, to improve further, consider providing more specific examples to support your points.

coherence cohesion

Your essay demonstrates good coherence and cohesion with a logical structure and clear introduction and conclusion. To enhance this aspect, ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs for a more cohesive flow of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

329 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

social status
material possessions
old-fashioned values
honour
kindness
trust
empathy
media influence
self-worth
metrics of success
financial achievements
community contributions
superficial connections
emotional bonds
life satisfaction
stress and anxiety
policy changes
community programs
restoring balance
personal character

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