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Some people view teenager conflicts with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whist others see it something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Almost all
parents
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 who have
teenagers
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 complain that their children have become unruly and disruptive.
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, their children too complain that their
parents
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 do not care for their feelings.
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 has become a commonplace occurrence in society. In my view, these conflict between
teenagers
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 and their
parents
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 is a normal part of life, and elders should tactfully guide their wards out of these conflicts. Adolescence is the coming of age of a person. During
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 period,
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 person tries to assert his opinions after being submissive for a long time as a child. He is
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 now flooded with hormones that fuel his attitude to assert himself.
Parents
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 are taken unawares at
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 rebellious attitude, after seeing their children behave nicely in their younger years. Earlier, due to cultural bindings, most of the
teenagers
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 were beaten down and again forced into submission. But, over time,
parents
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 have become accommodative and friendly.
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, now at least the young adolescents get to openly express their protest. Though some people feel that bringing conflicts in the open is embarrassing and negative, they cannot be
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 from the truth. By disallowing the youth from expressing his opinion, and trying to paper over the core conflict, these people breed resentment in the youth. Later on,
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 resentment manifests itself in drugs, drinks and crime. I conclude with my candid opinion that
parents
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 should openly discuss with their
teenagers
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, any issues that bother them, and should try to resolve them in a humane way. It is heartening to know that most
parents
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 nowadays accept the rebellious attitude of their wards, and are not ashamed of it.
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, society has grown up to meet the needs of the youngsters and not suppress them.
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