Some people believe that children should be made disciplined by making them obey rules and do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Others, however, believe that those children who are controlled are not well prepared to tackle the challenges life brings to them. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The question here is whether discipline promotes learning and creates the right ambience for a
child
's growth. Some people believe it does. Others believe it does not. Both schools of thought have arguments of their own. So, there is a little bit of truth on both sides, but only up to a point. On the one side of the spectrum are those
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believe by obeying rules children become better citizens and better people. They do not fall into bad company, do not go astray and become more focused. Take the case of children coming out of broken families. Since they had nobody at home to check their errant
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and channel their energies, since they had nobody to guide them along the right path, at times they graduate from minor misdemeanours to serious crimes.
On the other hand
, others believe children who are controlled become inhibited and rote learners. They come to depend on elders in the family for every decision governing
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of their lives. They come to develop a sheltered mentality and are scared of making mistakes. When they grow up, they will not be innovative and creative. They might even be unable to
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decisions on their own. When an unexpected situation arises, they will be at a loss. I am of the considered opinion that every
child
should be free to commit mistakes and learn from them. Only that
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freedom too should be in moderation. Elders in the family should desist from handholding but draw a line, giving the
child
all the freedom until he crosses the line. While serious indiscipline leads to bad behaviour and disregard for others, too much
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discipline restricts the freedom and creativity of the
child
. Let the
child
feel free in between.
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