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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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As we know,
museums
 and
art
galleries
 play an important role in society to show us a glimpse of the past. With their existences, we learn history and from history, we could learn how the current world came to be. I think it important that these
museums
 and
art
galleries
 are accessible for everyone. Though, I think the advantages of having admission
fees
 for
entry
 outweigh the disadvantages as long as they are at a fair price. By making
people
 pay to enter, it will help to pay for maintenances and services at the museum. And
also
, paying for admission
fees
 will filter out
people
 that do not really want to appreciate the
museums
 or
art
galleries
. I will try to explain
this
further
 in the essay. I think that money collected from
entry
fees
, could really be helpful for maintaining the
galleries
. Even if, the
galleries
 are subsidised by the local government, it will help to reduce the amount of money the government subsidise. And think
this
 clearly outweigh the disadvantages of having to pay for
entry
. Since it will alleviate some burden from the government. Having
entry
 tickets
also
 means that only a person that really wants to enter the
gallery
 can enter. If it is free, there will certainly be some
people
 that will abuse
this
. Whether there are
people
 that could do damage to the
gallery
 or
people
 that do totally unrelated things inside the
gallery
.
Therefore
, it is better to charge
people
 for
entry
. To summarize, I think there are more advantages to charging
people
 for admission
fees
. With
entry
 tickets, other than it will be very helpful for the
gallery
's economy, it could
also
 filter
people
 that really want to appreciate the
gallery
. And with these advantages, it will be better for the
museums
 or
art
galleries
 in the long-term
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