Some people think that children should be encouraged to travel more while at school to broaden their experience. Others think that not enough time is spent in the classroom learning the basics of a good education.

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children to
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more and other people think just
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time
on basics good education.
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more
time
to
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,
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classroom learning
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to
more
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than
travel
. The first reason I support
travel
more is that
student
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students
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could better feel
this
world and more clearly know and understand what
teacher
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teaching.
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students
study
Georgrapgy
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geography
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. Taking children to experience some places where
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that will make them remember more.clearly.Just like many schools will organize
students
to go to history museums and forest parks. Is to let
students
understand the knowledge in the book. Of course, some
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can’t balance
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and
relax as well
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. So they will become lazy,because of their self-control. So I support
traveling
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must less than 40% and class learning
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more important. The second reason I encourage
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travel
more is that
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pressure.
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students
always
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pressure, their learning efficiency will be reduced.
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most of the
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can’t concentrate on the class. But they need more
time
to
study
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travel
, which will not make them lazy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broaden their experience
  • exposure to different cultures
  • interpersonal abilities
  • develop social skills
  • adaptability
  • structured learning environment
  • academic success
  • critical for academic success
  • solid foundation
  • balanced approach
  • complemented by
  • enriching experiences
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