In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case. Do you think this a positive or negativve situation.

In the present era, accommodation is the necessity of everyone. In many countries, more
people
prefer to own their
houses
in contrast
to leasing one.
This
essay will discuss why it is very important to be an owner of a
house
. As per my view, I think
this
preference of
people
is positive.
First
of all, in some
countries
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the inflation rate is getting high day y day and
people
are overburdened by imposing different taxes by Government so
also
due to inflation the landlords have
also
increased rent which creates a disturbance for the
people
of
middle
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the middle
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and lower class.
Moreover
, the middle and lower range of
people
who own their
houses
do
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not worry about the monthly rent.
For
instance
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in a recent
survey
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it
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found that about 60 % of the community who own homes do not have the pressure of the rent and
also
they saved money in comparison to others who lived in rented
houses
.
Therefore
owning a
house
is very necessary.
Secondly
, the
people
who have their own accommodation are safe from any type of problems like they do not have security and they feel safe in their own
houses
. Whereas, those
people
who reside in rented homes have no privacy and security. Whenever the landlord wants to come or visit his
house
, the tenant has no right to restrain him.
For example
, in a recent study, almost 30%
incidents
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of theft and robbery were done in a rented
house
by the robbers who pretends to be the family members of landlords and looted the tenant.
Therefore
, it is the
second
main issue that allows me to think it is mandatory for
people
to own a
house
. To conclude, I think it is very necessary to own
houses
in comparison to rented homes.
People
should
also
think about owning
houses
who prefer rented
houses
to save themselves from any trouble or money loss.
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