Advertising is all around us; it is an unavoidable part of everyone’ life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?/

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Everyone at some point in their life has been an Advertisement, it has become inevitable to escape them these days. The question is if they are a positive

part

of our

lives

or not

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I, somewhat agree with

this

statement. From my perspective,

Ads

have become a major

part

of our

lives

, whether we watch them on our TVs on YouTube or in the newspaper, they spread awareness of new and current technology

while

also

providing us with information about upcoming sales which could be useful to some

people

. Advertisements can

also

be used to campaign for/against a cause, sending a message to enormous amounts of

people

at once. Advertisements

also

help

people

brainstorm and think of new and creative ways to turn them into customers.

However

Ads

have

also

become a negative

part

people

lives

as they have become too excessive and have

also

become misleading with time. In my opinion, with the rise in technology,

Ads

have become more misleading to gain customers who are naive or don't read the terms and conditions and it becomes hard to differentiate if an advertisement is misleading or not.

Ads

can

also

be used to spread opinions against a certain institution/person because of the influence they have on the general masses.

To conclude

, Advertisements these days have their pros and cons, but I think the number of advantages outweighs the number of cons and have become a positive

part

of our

lives

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grammar vocabulary

There are some grammatical and lexical inaccuracies, such as 'Everyone at some point in their life has been an Advertisement' and 'to gain customers who are naive or don't read the terms and conditions.' Aim for fewer linguistic errors to enhance clarity.

task response

Specific examples or more concrete evidence would strengthen your essay. For instance, you could mention a specific ad campaign that has raised awareness or been misleading.

coherence cohesion

The essay could benefit from a more balanced examination of the effects of advertising. Try to dedicate equal weight to both sides of the argument to show a comprehensive understanding.

structure

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.

task response

You have addressed the task reasonably well by providing points for both the positive and negative aspects of advertising.

coherence cohesion

Good use of paragraphing helps to keep your argument organized and easy to follow.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

242 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

informative
engages
creative
art form
consumerism
materialism
misleading
exaggerating
vulnerable
unrealistic
body image expectations
competitive
economical
targeted ads
personalized ads
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Advertising is all around us; it is an unavoidable part of everyone’ life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?/

Fully explain your ideas

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International organizations should provide developing countries with practical aid and advice rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?