Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In
this
modern era, some individuals choose to
work
by themselves rather than doing the job for
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company.The main reason is a hectic life.The following paragraphs will describe more reasons and the disadvantage of being self-employed.
To begin
with,working in international companies or even small companies means
lots
of stress and workloads.In
this
technological era, everything is fast-paced,everybody works round the clock and these firms have
lots
of
work
pressure,
lots
of presentations to do as according to research 70%of economy of the country depends on these businesses.Sometimes, a person has to
work
after office hours.
Moreover
, these enterprises do not have a fixed schedule. Everything,
work
according to the volume of
work
.
On the other hand
, in
this
technological era, there are many other options available to choose own business and make their own fixed schedule.
Furthermore
,they can
work
according to their own comfort.
For example
, in jobs like freelancing,private tuitions individuals can
work
according to themselves.
In contrast
, when people choose self-employed,it needs
lots
of investment and time.
Further
, they
also
do not get enough money as compared to the company salary.
Also
,
this
work
is not always fixed.It just depends on demand ,for a short period.
In addition
,it needs
lots
of proper steps to set up a business.Government license,need to pay taxes and many more.
However
, in private jobs population do not need to pay full taxes,just a small amount gets deducted from their salaries which are used for their own facilities. To conclude,every coin has two faces
,
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like that self-employes has both advantage and disadvantages.But the disadvantage outweighs the advantage.
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