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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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 by themselves rather than doing the job for
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company.The main reason is a hectic life.The following paragraphs will describe more reasons and the disadvantage of being self-employed.
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 with,working in international companies or even small companies means
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 of stress and workloads.In
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 technological era, everything is fast-paced,everybody works round the clock and these firms have
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 of
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 pressure,
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 of presentations to do as according to research 70%of economy of the country depends on these businesses.Sometimes, a person has to
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 after office hours.
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, these enterprises do not have a fixed schedule. Everything,
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 according to the volume of
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 technological era, there are many other options available to choose own business and make their own fixed schedule.
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,they can
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 according to their own comfort.
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, in jobs like freelancing,private tuitions individuals can
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 according to themselves.
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, when people choose self-employed,it needs
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 of investment and time.
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, they
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 do not get enough money as compared to the company salary.
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,
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work
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 is not always fixed.It just depends on demand ,for a short period.
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,it needs
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 of proper steps to set up a business.Government license,need to pay taxes and many more.
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, in private jobs population do not need to pay full taxes,just a small amount gets deducted from their salaries which are used for their own facilities. To conclude,every coin has two faces
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 like that self-employes has both advantage and disadvantages.But the disadvantage outweighs the advantage.
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