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Some people say that we must send our parents to old age home when they reach 60. However other think that they must be taken care at home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #parents #age #home #care
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In modern times,
people
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 have to live in congested urban areas and have jobs with long
hours
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 and low wages.
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 it is difficult for many
people
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 to host their elderly
parents
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 at home and take care of them. Old
age
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homes
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, with adequate nursing and messing facilities and affordable
fees
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 are a possible solution to
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 issue. In the following paragraphs, I shall examine both views with adequate examples and present my opinion. At the outset, elderly
people
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 need punctual care and companionship, and in today's busy world it is impossible for most children to provide that.
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, working
hours
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 in China are 12
hours
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 a day, 6 days a week. Even in European countries, unorganized labour has to work long
hours
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.
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 it is very difficult for working couples to find time to monitor their
parents
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 or provide medicines on time. Modern old
age
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homes
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 are providing excellent medical facilities to the senior citizens and the added benefit is that they can mingle with
people
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 of their own
age
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.
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, before children send their
parents
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 to an old
age
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 home, they should do a thorough background check and verify the quality of services provided. In most European countries, there are strict regulations guiding the services provided by these
homes
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.
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, the
parents
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 need to be reassured that ultimately they will benefit from
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 move. In the past, there have been cases in the United States where senior citizens were duped by some of these
homes
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.
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 sending one's
parents
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 to an old
age
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 home is a personal decision. In my opinion, if a family feels that they lack the time and resources to take care of their
parents
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then
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 they should move them to a good facility rather than keep them in
dilapitaded
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dilapidated
 conditions.
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